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[Jan. 30th, 2006|01:17 am]

maybe it was falling
your muscles fibers
before i knew
peculiar and sensibility
apart now
holding their selves
the bathroom tiles cold
upward, but
knobs turning, weak
apart now
so much that never
sensitivity has a name
a voice, a platform, two strong
belief in something
anything but this
goodbye then
try to make my theory of mind
pull on my arm
until taste transcends
i still cry
the materials here
salt, a silence, flood
settle for grace
you have to
the barometer tells
the lamp conducts nothing
the peace won’t fit
rough, scaly now
isn’t my ____ enough
pitch into the night through
purple coral gray
streets never
vulgar, over
you don’t want me
push, tug, pull
until the door finally shuts
x to y into z
i don’t know
give answers
i don’t know
i always knew

[User Picture]From: pirategail
2006-01-30 08:12 am (UTC)
Did you write that?
Because.. "It's beautiful. It's beautiful. It's beautiful, it's true."
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[User Picture]From: transubsituated
2006-01-30 08:43 am (UTC)
I did.

Because... "I saw its face, in a crowded place, and I don't know what to do." haha
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[User Picture]From: frozensilver17
2006-01-30 06:35 pm (UTC)
I like it. I like it a lot. It speaks to my spirit.

I love how it speeds up at the end, and then jumps off a cliff.

Brava, dear one. Brava.
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[User Picture]From: transubsituated
2006-01-31 03:20 am (UTC)
thank you. oh miss jay.
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From: materialising
2006-01-30 08:17 pm (UTC)
The double narrative/dialogic aspect here is really effective; I like it a lot.
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[User Picture]From: transubsituated
2006-01-31 03:22 am (UTC)
i was trying to do a role reversal thing but keep it "believable"/not too precisely on the mark. as in, one voice starts in the physical, the other in the non, but both leading to a conclusion, but whose. thanks.
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